Lee Duna to [email protected]English • 4 months agoRevealed: car industry was warned keyless vehicles vulnerable to theft a decade agowww.theguardian.comexternal-linkmessage-square55arrow-up1542arrow-down114cross-posted to: [email protected]
arrow-up1528arrow-down1external-linkRevealed: car industry was warned keyless vehicles vulnerable to theft a decade agowww.theguardian.comLee Duna to [email protected]English • 4 months agomessage-square55cross-posted to: [email protected]
minus-square@[email protected]linkfedilinkEnglish-7•4 months agoJust a writing tip: separate your points into distinct sections. Your point makes sense, but reads better when broken up into distinct paragraphs or thoughts.
minus-square@[email protected]linkfedilinkEnglish6•4 months agoIt’s already separated into two paragraphs, separating both points I’m making.
minus-square@[email protected]linkfedilinkEnglish-3•4 months agoCertainly is after your edits. Thanks.
minus-square@[email protected]linkfedilinkEnglish1•edit-24 months ago… I didn’t split it in two as an edit, it was split from the get go… Edit: I looked again and the only difference is that I added “proportionally”
Just a writing tip: separate your points into distinct sections.
Your point makes sense, but reads better when broken up into distinct paragraphs or thoughts.
It’s already separated into two paragraphs, separating both points I’m making.
Certainly is after your edits. Thanks.
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I didn’t split it in two as an edit, it was split from the get go…
Edit: I looked again and the only difference is that I added “proportionally”